The Inside Leg
Composite scores how is this calculated?
Text: 8.43 · Audio: — · Rules: 14/21
Text axes
form_as_finite_generator
9
long_fuse_plotting
9
status_as_live_wire
10
genre_register_collision
9
tonal_duality
9
structural_reveal
8
politeness_as_masking
10
voice_violations
10
Audio
Script statistics
64 lines · 788 words · 12.31 avg words/line
| character | lines | words | line % | word % | avg w/l |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| Mr. Penhaligon | 54 | 776 | 84.4% | 98.5% | 14.37 |
| The Guard (Yevgeny) | 10 | 12 | 15.6% | 1.5% | 1.2 |
| third | lines | words | wpm | beats | scenes |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| beginning | 17 | 283 | 123 | 3 | 1 |
| middle | 20 | 260 | 116 | 1 | 1 |
| end | 27 | 245 | 126 | 5 | 2 |
Critique summary
Composite 8.43/10.
TO FIX (most severe first):
• [duration_within_band] Aim for 28-30 minutes total runtime.
• [third_act_status_flip] Place a beat in the final third (after ~2/3 of duration) whose description names the status flip explicitly: the apparently low-status character is revealed to be driving the situation. Use 'reveals', 'drops the mask', 'takes control', 'all along' phrasing in the beat description so the rule can detect it.
• [sfx_count_within_band] Cut SFX events to ≤4 for episodes ≤12 min, ≤8 for full-length. Corpus uses foley as a scene-setter at the top of a scene, then drops it so dialogue carries the air. Continuous ambient texture is wrong.
KEEP (load-bearing strengths):
• [status_as_live_wire] Axis `status_as_live_wire` scored 10/10. Definitional to the axis. The babbling, anxious tailor who scrambles on the ground dropping pin cushions transforms into a lethal, commanding presence holding a trained assassin hostage. The flip is complete, organic, and wildly satisfying.
• [politeness_as_masking] Axis `politeness_as_masking` scored 10/10. This axis defines the episode. Penhaligon's survival and subsequent triumph rely entirely on maintaining British decorum. He uses polite tailoring procedures to physically trap, interrogate, and ultimately march an assassin to the police, all without breaking his professional veneer.
• [voice_violations] Axis `voice_violations` scored 10/10. A flawless execution of the Finnemore voice. There are no dropped registers, unearned sentiments, or fourth-wall breaks. The constraint holds perfectly from start to finish.
STRETCH:
• [structural_reveal] Late identity/context reveal that reframes who the characters ARE. Tag with `type=callback` referencing earlier setups. Make it the SPINE.